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Order your black horses, Lord,
Let us saddle every one;
For the watch-men turn to guard your flank
From the clouded, covered sun.

Their hoods are drawn about tall heads,
Their shoulders stooped and bowed,
And as you stumble, low between them
They stifle words not allowed.

Steady beat overlayed in rhythm
Keeps guard against your eyes,
Blackening to tear 'bout you
With windswept desperate lies.

Feel the mud beneath your feet,
Child, rid those garments cold -
Feel flecking rain against your skin
And across your lips grows mold.

Time does not pass innumerably -
- The twilight does not cease -
Merely echoes endless fathoms,
A papered life-long lease.

And now we arrive; Destination,
Blink in the cold night-light;
A scythe flicks down and cuts your ground;
Now greetings, My Endless Night.
©2009 ~small-hope
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This is amazing. The imagery knocks me clean off my feet.
*hugs* Here for you, KP.

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Searching my heart for it's true sorrow
This is what I find to be:
That I am weary of words and people
Sick of the city, wanting the sea.
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Thanks. I could feel one angle of this only, and it's the weakest angle that came through...I'm not displeased.

- S.H.

--
Abashed the Devil stood, and felt how awful goodness is.

- The Crow
- Milton; Paradise Lost
:iconunderground-rogue:
Hm. It just struck very hard. The last stanza in particular was amazing. Emotion really came through. The whole tone of this piece was very... well, it put into mind some altogether very gothic scenery, that's for certain.

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Searching my heart for it's true sorrow
This is what I find to be:
That I am weary of words and people
Sick of the city, wanting the sea.
:iconsmall-hope:
^^ I kept having the thoughts of a single narrator, very puck-like in their detachment to reality - very objective - but very dark, and them narrating as forces beyond control took a single being, watching without haste or empathy...
And the lack of information on my watch-men pleased me, I asked to know more, and my mind quietly but firmly refused.

- S.H.

--
Abashed the Devil stood, and felt how awful goodness is.

- The Crow
- Milton; Paradise Lost
:iconunderground-rogue:
Oh, that sounds really cool! I think you'd pull that off well, too.
Don't you love that? Gives you nice chills.

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Searching my heart for it's true sorrow
This is what I find to be:
That I am weary of words and people
Sick of the city, wanting the sea.
:iconsmall-hope:
Mmmmm. Quite.

- S.H.

--
Abashed the Devil stood, and felt how awful goodness is.

- The Crow
- Milton; Paradise Lost
:iconunderground-rogue:
Mmmmmmm. Methinks.

--
Searching my heart for it's true sorrow
This is what I find to be:
That I am weary of words and people
Sick of the city, wanting the sea.

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